Rattling along from station to station, the short line of old passenger cars carried its humble portion of the workforce home. Stop by stop, the hard benches emptied, until just a few tired souls remained aboard; in one of the cars, only one. The tracks grew quite curvy as they wound along a riverside into a mountain valley.
How the man’s neck ached
all the more as the train rocked
he composed his mind
thinking of an animal he loved
wading near a quaint marina
word count: 83
Interesting words, thinking of the animal he loved, “Love those words”, perfect.
Wishing you all the best for 2018.
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Aah, he craned his neck? Lovely marriage of the two prompts.
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Great structuring. Reminded me of Robert Service.
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There are strange things done in the midnight sun. By the men who moil for gold;. The Arctic trails have their secret tales. That would make your blood run cold…
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I hadn’t heard of Robert Service until 20+ years ago, when I was in a pub with a few work colleagues. I’d admitted that I’d never taken to poetry and one of them was urging me to read some Philip Larkin. I was saying I’d give it a try when I had more time, when I was interrupted by an inebriated stranger in dirty work clothes, with the words, “It is later than you think”. He suggested I should get on with it and start reading poetry straightaway, but he dismissed Larkin as a misanthrope and said I should begin with something by “the Kipling of the Yukon”. He then went on to recite several of Service’s poems very loudly. He finished by challenging me to an arm-wrestling match. I went along with it to avoid offending him (he had the air of an unexploded bomb) and lost 2/1 (he let me win once, I think). When he’d finished he staggered to the bar, leaving me at an empty table, my companions all having slinked off to another one while I was distracted. Drunk or not, his recommendation was a good one.
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wow – you met the poetry fairy!
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I hadn’t thought of it that way, but you make a good point. This was certainly one of those chance meetings that reminds us not to judge a book by its cover.
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Great story! I felt like I was riding on the train with him!
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You tied this together nicely. But then I am biased as I love rattling old steam engines.
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Peaceful and calm. I enjoyed it.
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i love this one. kill the quite and quaint. both judging words that dont belong in the world you built.
my favorite piece so far. beautiful.
thanks for making this powm
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